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Tell me your opinion on this poem!
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I remember when I looked in your eyes
I knew it was true
My heart never lies
I was in love with you

You stood there
Just looking around
My whole body melted
Right into the ground

I remember the day
I remember the time
I remember the place
It's always on my mind

You looked so good
In your shirt and jeans
I remember the night
You were in my dreams

I wish I could be with you
Day after day
Because I love you
More than words could ever say!!

*~SARAH~*
;) 
this is an excellent poem sarah its very touching when u first told me it i was like ~*~Awwwwwwwwww~*~ its really  very sweet ;)

*hugs*


♥-ÅnğэĹ-♥ aka ~*~Nikki~*~:p
Sweet just Sweet..

Your caring and loving none poem writing Mod STORMY




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awwww shucks sarah i didnt know u cared!!!
Aww thank you!! I am glad yall liked it!! :D
Y'all This poem was written for My b/f ADAM and I (L) him very much!! Newayz I hope Yall like it!
it was lovely.......untill the second verse :|  .. when u said you melted into the ground..... how did you manage to finish the poem after that? :-P
a poem to kill ur self too :) like coldplay : d
Well Jingle_Balls well its just a figure of speech, but if you liked it im glad if didn't...o well!!
*~SARAH~*~AKA~*~♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥~*
really cool guy, I'm glad you liked my poem!!........Thank You Everyone for replying!!

*~SARAH~*~AKA~*~♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥~*
mabey you should name it after me? (thought)
 yea sure......I'll name it after a perfect stranger...lol!! :p

*~SARAH*~*♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥~*
aawwww that was reely sweet but when u melted into the ground was like just...lol....the poem was awsome!!:P
It was good tell me what you think of this


And when he gets to heaven, 
To Saint Peter he will tell,
Another soldier reporting sir,
I've served my time in hell.

Well, what ya think Rainin Kia

Lol Rainin.

Nice poem...it could touch hearts...but for love? (j/k)
It was wonderful to take the time to share a good happiness there should be in Tanx..unfortunantly, there are still chances for war. I do not know why, but thanks for reminding us for peace!

Pohatu Nuva['_']
you asked: tepid, artless, tripe 

(time/mind ,dreams/jeans)??? read some Emily Dickenson and...

 burn this poem.
WHy do you have to disagree with everyone rate are you anul retentive???
he cant help that he has to make everything joyful turn to a whole bunch of nothing.........It may not be work of art but atleast i tried!! :|
no your poem is good


and he can screw off


Rainin Kia
Kopaka Nuva
Thanx for the suport i realy appriciate it ;)
I would apologize if it was due.
You asked for opinions.....if it were otherwise I would have gladly opined otherwise.
My opinion stands.....  Rainin relax, it wasn't personal.... (don't know the kid)but it's obvious you and the other "critics" here wouldnt know a good verse if it were turned in your keyhole. 
Here's another poem about longing 

     the west wind brought her
     but not to me
     her presence a prairie fire
     I am swept over and left
     desolate charred and blackened 

     then, with a clarity that rivals 
     even the desert night
     she seeks not vain affectations
     the straight path strewn with bright blooms 
     my gifts to her where only this
     I knew no other

     no east wind blows her back to me,no
     she is gone
     I lie as death and wait
     the rains will come 


feel free to dismiss it  hate it love it etc.    its out there and THAT is all that matters about ART
       

     
My comment on your poem 
♥Ñõ☼1`Ś☼Ćĥĩķ♥
 would be:


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Rate this ,it looks as if she did a lot of damage with that wind... tell her to lay off the baked beans
lol...perfect!!.....I didnt write it, so I dont know her ...but Ill let ya know if an ill wind blows this way.......
Id rather not know.....suffer it yourself lol