I would apologize if it was due.
You asked for opinions.....if it were otherwise I would have gladly opined otherwise.
My opinion stands..... Rainin relax, it wasn't personal.... (don't know the kid)but it's obvious you and the other "critics" here wouldnt know a good verse if it were turned in your keyhole.
Here's another poem about longing
the west wind brought her
but not to me
her presence a prairie fire
I am swept over and left
desolate charred and blackened
then, with a clarity that rivals
even the desert night
she seeks not vain affectations
the straight path strewn with bright blooms
my gifts to her where only this
I knew no other
no east wind blows her back to me,no
she is gone
I lie as death and wait
the rains will come
feel free to dismiss it hate it love it etc. its out there and THAT is all that matters about ART